Tuesday, January 29, 2008


please spread the word to all of your friends!

people, I'm glad for your comments, but, WHAT LANGUAGE?

(FYI, I answer your comments)

please be little more specific,

I am sorry if i'm being a little thick right now but what do you mean about what "language"?
bad or good?
ANYWAY, new part of moi book and this is a unedited version so get this direct from the table.
enjoy and keep the comments coming, I think we've got something started!

The Constantine Brothers.


‘Vampires?! We haven’t dealt with those in years! Oh no, this so not on, this is a living nightmare.’ Said Damon,

‘I know.’ Said James.

‘I wonder if they are the same as before…’ he trailed off, realizing that all eyes where on him.

‘I really doubt it guys.’ John said composedly.

‘well’ said Hal, ‘there is one way to find out.’

James gulped and whimpered like a dog; he had tried to kill a vampire, but failed, and almost got killed in doing so.

He has a phobia of vampires because as a child he was mentally tortured by them, and one in particular stood out vividly in his mind, the one he had a real, hot, bubbling hatred for, the one he had tried to kill, and almost got killed himself.

‘Damon, get every thing you can on these guys and find out EXACTLY where they are currently located.’

‘Um, they are located in Kimberton Philadelphia .’

‘ James,’ said John, ‘are you ready? Its gonna be a long trip.’

James; ‘yeah, approximately 3 hour drive from here.’

‘Well, Its nice to see you back in form.’ John said with a smile,

‘Oh, please.’ Said James, obviously annoyed at his brother, but that at least took his mind temporarily off of the problem at hand.

Sure enough, the trip was pretty long, by the time they had reached their destination after getting lost a few times, in fact the trip had lasted almost four hours, and it was no longer light, it being 11’ o clock when they reached a fork in the road bearing the title of; “welcome to the McMaster mansion”

‘Wow, what a dump.’ Said Hal,

‘Wasn’t always like that.’ Admonished James,

‘How would you know that?’

James looked at Hal as if saying; “you don’t want to know.”

John added;

‘He was here once, he had tried, fool as he was, to eliminate a group of vampires years ago, basically a revenge mission which had almost killed him instead.’

Despite what Hal had just said, the location looked nothing like a dump, in fact, it was a rusty gate with pillars topped with menacing gargoyles, it’s appearance was scarier thanks to a rosemary bush that had integrated itself with the pillars.

‘Well, we can’t sit here forever, so lets do this thing!’

he flipped on the high beams on his lights and pressed the gas pedal hard, spinning the rear wheels, but everyone knew that James was being cautious and was simply trying to cover it up.

There were some dips and ups in the road, trees lining the sides of the dirt road, suddenly as they went around a corner and saw a sheer drop of cliff!

James slammed the brakes and the car skidded to a halt, the tires right on the edge, James knew that the car was going to get stuck, he slammed the car into reverse and expertly maneuvered the car back to relative safety,

Shit, that was a blind corner and I wasn’t expecting that.’ James said, taking time for his heart to resume a more sane speed.

‘Hang on, this was not here a few years ago,’ said Damon, who felt puzzled,

‘Uh-oh, this has just confirmed my deepest fear,’ said John, stepping out of the car and walking towards the edge,

‘Oh dear,’ he said to himself, ‘I was right.’

He got back into the car,

‘What do you mean?’ asked Hal,

John sighed and said; ‘we’ve landed our selves into some really nasty acid, I’ll explain only if we continue on our journey because were wasting time.’

James re-started the engine and drove on really cautiously this time, he wondered why he could not remember much from his previous encounter with a vampire,

‘it’s like this, the power instability between Heaven and Hell has grown to proportions that even god himself is having trouble keeping the Time Space Continuum in between both worlds, thus the hole you see next to us is one of the Space Continuum rifts, which is basically a black whole except it’s not sucking anything in, but out, this continuum rift is fairly recent and has healed approximately 60, maybe %65, the only problem with one of this size is that it takes four to five years to heal, therein lies the problem, if the creatures of the underworld realize that there is one of this size, we as the human race run the risk of being overrun, and thus, what we call an apocalypse, happens.

What happens after that, is, to put it frankly, impossible to forecast.’

‘My god, were in trouble now.’ After hearing this tidbit, Hal had almost pissed his pants from fear,

‘That is why we have the power to See, to eliminate the problem before it gets serious.’

They continued on the road towards the mansion without further incident.

Almost. At on part in the road they had to drive across a bridge and it didn’t look good.

They stepped out of the car looked at and across.

‘Oh bugger, this does not look good at all, my eyesight is getting a little bleary.’

Said James irritably, everybody snorting and muttering, then he added; ‘if you think I’ll let you drive across this matchstick pile, think again and reconsider your options.’

‘Don’t you just hate it when he says stuff like that during some of the tensest moments in history?’

‘Okay, how’s this scan; we get out and cross, you drive across. This will hope fully minimize chances of going down together.’

James revved the engine, then said; ‘well? What are you waiting for? Get out and across and gimme a shout on how stable that pile of matchstick is.’

They got out and crossed, and then called James telling him the chances were slim, but if he still wanted to he could try, he revved the engine then gunned it, the car flew across the bridge the rear tires had almost no grip on the rotting wood which flew in all directions in the shape of shrapnel and a couple of substantial beams fell down below before splintering apart with dull thunks. They clambered inside after contemplating the damage to the bridge.

A wind from the north blew dead leaves on to the windshield leaving behind wet marks,

The house appeared in front of them like a castle out of a fantasy novel, for it was made of stone and had towers coming out of the sides, gargoyles perched on every corner of the house and even side by side next to the entrance way like wooden women on the bow of a ship, except these were made of stone, horrific in size, and hideous in look and in particularly, realism.

They got out of the car gaping at what lay before them when Hal broke the silence,

‘We’ve a long night ahead of us boys, and something tells me it won’t be for kicks this time around too.’

‘The sense of evil here gives me a whole new perspective on the word evil.’

Everybody, including John, stared at Damon; this was the first time he had actually sensed an evil presence lurking somewhere in the house’s depths.

‘Welcome to the club at last, ironic isn’t it, that it had to be tonight for the initiation of your discovery, but it’s a good thing, because we will be dealing with some bad characters indeed.’ John said acknowledging the fact that Damon was now going to play a much bigger part in the team now that he could feel demonic presences.

The front doors opened with a sound that’s normally associated with one setting their teeth on edge after they’ve heard it, and carefully walked in taking in the gloom of the once richly furnished room, with gargoyles.

‘Geez, how many of these does the previous owner have? Um, on reflection, I don’t think I want to know.’ John said, feeling that today they might meet their match and hoping fervently they wouldn’t, they jumped and shuddered at every creek and whoosh of air and it was then that John realized, with a sinking feeling, that his hunch was right and the alarm bells in his head were on for a really, really, good reason

The vampires were using completely different tactics then in a previous encounter before,

And this piece of info was all anyone needed to know before turning in the opposite direction and taking off for their lives.

‘This is getting us nowhere, we have to split up.’ He said,

‘In pairs?’ asked Damon in a would be calm voice that clearly said he was bracing himself for the worst.

‘I’m afraid not.’

Everyone gulped at the suggestion.

Mean while…

‘As soon as zey entered the house it vos like music to my ears.’ Marishka said with a deep Transylvanian accent, ‘their heartbeats are getting faster by the minute, except for one, yes, he’s unfathomable and I like it.’ She said giggling.

‘Marishka, don’t get in over your head, their spiritual power outclasses

Any and all of the rabble ve’ve dealt vith so far.’

‘Anna, an invasion of food is here, it ought to keep us satisfied till the next moon.’

Grinning horribly was their sister, Magdalena, fangs growing in length like two calcium shards of glass…

‘Oh buddy, I’ve got bad vibes already.’ John said nervously looking at everyone else as they were rooted to their spots,

‘right, we split in three, two, one…’

They split up, going into separate rooms throwing closets and doors open trying to make sure there wasn’t anything to be afraid of…

Oh, boy; thought Damon, ‘something’s there In front of me and I can’t see it…’

He stepped across a threshold and peered into the next room thinking it was clear, when a small but extremely vicious something flew at him, he tried to shoot it but his gun didn’t work.

It went past him turned in midair, came back at him scratching his face knocking him down with the force of a small bomb, he pulled his silver knife out just in time and buried it to the hilt into the creatures flesh and exploded into a gooey ash like gunk.

A smell so rancid reached his nose he coughed and vomited, after steadying himself and taking a fortifying gulp of water he surveyed the scene, and heard squeaking that matched the previous victim of his blade.

‘oh nice,’ he said sarcastically ‘this is gonna smell like hell when I’m done.’

And he waited for it, tensely, all alone, no, not true, his buddies where also here he reasoned, but judging by the sounds emanating from the rest of the house, nobody would be able to come down if he screwed up, and so he waited as the sounds coming towards him were getting louder and louder…

John was being cautious, and understandably so too. He looked around taking in the scene, he knew something was waiting in the shadows and he felt his skin crawl, his instincts were telling him to Get The Hell Out of Here.

Quick as flash Anna came at him, he pulled the trigger and nothing happened, he was slammed into the unforgiving stone wall and regaining his balance swinging a well timed hit at the Vampires face.


‘Oww, that hurt you bad boy’ she said giggling as she turned back at him, her nose repaired itself with a snap of bone reconnecting.

‘Oh god, the rumors were true.’ He said, pulling his silver nail the size of your forefinger,

He readied his offence as she came bounding towards him, jaws stretched grotesquely open, teeth glistening horribly…

Hal, had just stumbled on a room full of strange cocoons that where writhing.

Gross, oh nasty god yuckitty yuck yuck, phwwoooaaaarrrr, he thought.

He pulled out his can of highly concentrated alcohol and sprayed it all over the cocoons careful to avoid contact with them as he hated slime in any form, then he poured gasoline on to the floor and threw his lighter onto it. He ran as fast as he could away due to the fact the smell had seemed to have a strange affect on him.

And ran into something large and very muscular, he fell and stared in horror at the two vampires in front of him, he turned around and ran screaming blue murder with the two leviathans roaring after him…

James was not enjoying it much either.

He was being preyed upon, and he knew it, and this had really scared the hell out of him,

It was all he could do not turning around and running towards the safety of his car, he also knew that if gave even the slightest opening, he’d be finished instantly with a flash of claw and a dainty burp.

And stared, lo and behold, at the nightmare that had tortured him before he had known his granddad, his legs turned to jelly, his vision coming in and out made him frustrated and exposed.

‘Tut, tut, you’re a right old mess’ Marishka said, savoring the smell of fear and cold sweat, smiling at him, showing briefly her fangs which glowed in the moon light also without fail intimidating the pants off of him almost literally,

‘Why so patronizing Vampire?’ he said finding his voice, it came out, low and manly just how he liked it, (even though he was scared beyond imagination)

‘Remember the fun we had vhen you where a little boy?’ she disappeared only to appear instantaneously before him, hugging him,

‘you are going to die today’ she said in a soft and mock sing along voice in his ear sending a chill of unadulterated hate up his spine, she launched him across the room into a heavy oak door that splintered into shrapnel the size of sausages before landing into a glass case shattering instantly, ‘and I’m the one who will do it!’

he got up, he was pissed and she was going to pay,

He grabbed a broad sword feeling its weight and felt his senses telling him it was silver, purrfect, he thought, she came down on him chucking him towards the sealing and he came down with a thud that would’ve shattered a normal humans bones, but he was not human,

He got up, looking at the full moon and thought before losing all sane thought,

“Dammit, granddads seal is not working properly anymore”

‘I am amazed that you survived that.’ She said laughing,

He turned around and looked into her eyes, his pupils dilated like a cats, his muscles grew and bulged, veins showing clearly, adrenaline rushing through him acting like a strength booster, stared with pure unadulterated hate at her, he laughed like a maniac, a reneged Vampire, two huge wings covered in black feathers exploded out of his back.

‘this power, it feels goood’ he howled, 'AAAAAAAAAAAOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!'

‘you, you are the fallen angel for the vampires’ she said stunned, before recovering and laughing again, ‘come, feel the drive, drink with us and become one us, a leader of your own clan’ she saw right there and then that he was beyond reason and she was risking it big time, howling in despair, knowing this was not going to happen in another hundred years she attacked, he drove the sword through her chest the silver burning the flesh,

‘Missed’ she said and took off slashing his chest.

He shrank back into a human, panting, when he heard a scream and saw Hal being chased passed the open door by the vampires,


‘Oh, boy this aint good.’ He stood up ignoring the searing pain on his chest and back, he followed into the main room where they had started off.

‘Any ideas on getting rid of these?’ yelled Hal over the commotion.

‘Nope, you?’ John yelled back

That’s when every one heard a something that sounded familiar;

And what they saw next was one hell of a surprise.


Michael D. said...

Language as in profanity, swearing etc.

foodcritic55 said...

hm, gotcha...

Abby said...


I'm sorry, but I really can't give you much commenting in your writting right now. I have about a million things to do! Sad but true. These professors get cranky when you don't do the homework they assign. Anyhow, I just wanted to stop by you blog on my way to my psyc book and say hi. I wish you the best of luck. From one writer to another, don't ever stop. And don't let other people tell you that you are wrong. Let your inner self be your guide as to what you want to write.


karatetigerz96 said...

Aw, man! You just had to end it there!?

I hope you update soon! I really wanna see what happens...

Iced Lollipop said...

Hello there! I'm a friend of Shekinah's. She asked me to read your story, and it's excellent! Good plot, and it's written really well, too. Good job!

=) Danielle

Faith said...

yo, wassup? yeah, I agree with Michael. This is not something I would want my brother to read. If it's an adult novel, then it's fine. But as a teen novel, er...try to keep it clean. You'll get more readers that way.